Comments : The Walls

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaz

    Well this poem shows ur feeeling lonely. very lonely n. hmmm u hate life.. n u r just ignorin evry good thing abt life.. well u need to cheer up.. but overall its gr8.. u express pain too deply. gud wrk

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very good, but I didnt like how the lines flowed. They didnt really compliment each other. This poem was a little lengthy and because it really didnt draw me int I got easily distracted while reading this piece. Its a good try but I'm gonna have to give it 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Saddening, and full of emotion.....good poem, lengthy but kept my attention. It was great how you made the title very relevent to the poem and these were my fav lines
    The Walls that are my journal.
    My journal, no one can ever read
    It was an excellent flowing piece and it ended powerfully...5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Marius Laun

    A little bit long, but it was well written. IT was very sad, but it was beautiful in that as well, I reallly ilke it. I dont know what else to say, it was that good

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Aww. this poem is so sad i hope you don't really have to deal with all that!
    Well written poem...full of feeling and emtoin....great job...keep it upo!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Very Thick Imagery. It is loaded with Detail which helps show the drama, however Offsets the theme a bit. There are some points that Seem Pushed, And Doesnt Have a Smooth Flow, But As A Whole It Is a Well Written Piece.

    {4/5}

    [PygmyPuff]

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    A very emotional andm oving piece you have here. It was deep and interesting with the emotions easy to relate too. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    Liked the concept of the song and the structure. Although the stanza structure, it's more a story than a poem. will give a 4/5 because of it's interesting and creative way.

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I thought the title was very eye catching and really grabs the reader at first glance. I thought it was a little long but it definately kept me interested and wanting more at the same time. Excellent job once again 5/5 GG23 p.s. I will give you these votes, if you could please go back and vote my poem. thankyou - take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    I'm a bit confused, yet still fairly impressed. It did ramble on a bit, but it seems like that was necessary to get your point across. A great read!

  • 16 years ago

    by WitherBlisterBurnandPeel

    This poem really drew me in...maybe because i can relate, and because it was really well written, you kept my attention and kept me guessing as to what was going to happen next.
    I enjoyed the read a lot
    Complex :)

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Beautifully written poem...very full of emotion and sad and lonely. Great details and imagery! Keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by abcede

    Umm yea that was really awesome and intense!!! i loved it!!! OOMMGG!!!! even though it didn't rhyme or flow like perfectly well or whatever, the whole idea of what you were saying really shined through the diction!! 5/5 - you hit this one on the head of a nail

  • 16 years ago

    by Men

    It's a good poem but it was also quite lengthy however it took me a while to understand fully overall it was a great piece of work 4/5 good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I am really loving your poems. They are amazing..

    This was so sad, yet intriguing. I love how you worded the poem. I can explain it, but it was very unique. I liked the metaphores and how you kept talking about the walls. You are definitely going on my favorites!

    Cayce xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Kittens Poems

    This poem really touched me. I hope this really isn't the way you live. If so, please tell someone, nobody should have to live with such abuse. I was there once myself, but I am older and wiser now.