I loved this. Extremely creative and well written. Love poetic narratives, and you did one hell of a good job. :)

WOW!! honestly, i haven't read such poem before and this one caught me so speechless.. i really enjoy reading this one first i love how the vivid emotions twisted and combined together. second, how your imagintaion and ideas worked.. it's as if you're just telling it from your own experience and you just created freaky fictional poem. great work!!

This was just amazing! The story you told was one that started out with such great descriptions and darkness but ended with the lightness of a good heart. It was a twist to the end that I truly did enjoy. On the other side, I do thing the flow was kinda rocky, but the story told was immensly powerful. Well done *5/5*

Well, I must say, I did like this one.... darkness meets the light. Rhyme and flow was good, very descriptive, well done Orbie.

**thanks to sunny for her classified ad title toss haha*
^^that comment cracked me up!! :D

Wow gripping poem! I loved it! I especially loved the twist at the end.....very good write! Strong and unique...loved it! 5/5

Omg.. i freaking love this one! i love the rhymes.. the symoblism.. everything!!! THIS ONE IS MY FAVORITE THAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN!! wow!! thats all i can see.. keep it up! :o] *you have some real talent*

That was a great story and a fantastic poem I loved every word. I enjoyed all of your work and hope to see more in the future Plot121

I don't really have too much to say. It was a good poem.

Very...creative

Hold me, im crying

Wow i love the story behind this poem... this is one of my favorites man.. i'm gonna add u to my favorites... your one talented writer! =]

"Get off the table now mortal,
your wings you've earned this day
remember to bow as our lord approaches
and linger not in his way"

one of my favorite stanzas ^^

Actually the whole poem is my favorite, NOW THIS IS A MASTER PEICe, i love it, its amazing, the flow as great, the rhmying was awesome, and overall a magnificent message behind it all, A WELL WELL DESERVED 5/5

A completely surrounding and engrossing story, humourous in the oddest fashion, deep, sincere, positively dripping with grey areas and generally...very little not to love.