Comments : Love gone forever

  • 10 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    ExcellenT writinG... i likE painfuL expressionS iN lifE thaN happinesS... I aM pooR... i aM sincerE..... i likE sharinG painS... 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This kind of scared, on the real, but it was written in such an amazing way to the point that I just let go of my fear. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow I am literally speechless I liked it though there has times I wished I could have the courage to write that and I absolutely loved it even though it was a little graphic anyway you should check out some of mine there not as good but hey I try
    Bridgette

  • 10 years ago

    by FlashLove

    Lovely!

  • 10 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    I've never liked reading poems like this,
    but I have to admit, this one was really good.
    There were some grammatical errors,
    but that is common with poetry on a site.
    The depth and emotion you put in this one,
    made everything flow together nicely.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hermosa

    Wow that was outstanding...I loved it, there was somuch feeling in it! great job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Melvin LeVeque

    Good job,

  • 10 years ago

    by Melvin LeVeque

    Ty mel

  • 10 years ago

    by JustKristina

    Oops.. lol i kinda gotta little messed up.. haha but i freaking loved this! awesome write again, you are amazing! great work again! loved this line..
    It's hurts to know the only kiss ill get from you, is when I'm dead.
    so sad... but i loved it! great job again. you are super talented.. great work!

    <<Kristina>>

  • 10 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    To improve upon:
    >consistancy of how you write, even though this was just probably a typo.>>'ill'- I'll.

    >flow is more important than rhyme.>>To know you are with somebody else, much pain it brings.- that second part of that line needs to be tweaked to flow.

    >try not to use to many cliches, it makes it much more original. [future reference.]

    >too many emo poems have invaded this sight and it has gotten to be such a bore. your mention of a cut on your wrist just drove me crazy.>>Because this cut in my wrist is getting pretty deep. - maybe instead say heart, even though i know it's cliche.

    well, it's up to you what advice you take.

    and thanks for that comment you left on my site. =]

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This poem has great flow, you did good job with rhymes. You expressed emotions in a good way, letting your words to pour straight from the heart, which makes this piece quite touching.

  • 10 years ago

    by Marissa merrow

    This is really intense. i love it. good job =)

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Creative poem with perfect rhymes and great great flow. Loved the wordings and the total poem is of high quality :) 5/5

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 10 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    Pretty good..a few grammar and spelling errors..i suggest reread it..but a good write nonetheless

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow i have to say that was such a moving poem... almost disturbing... but i liked it alot... nice job!

  • 10 years ago

    by sammie

    Can't Wait for more of your poems to come it's like you reach into your soul and get the words its amazing 5/5 i love it xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Danielle

    I like this poem because I can sympathize.
    & I think a lot of other people can too.
    Great job

    :)

  • 10 years ago

    by lover girl

    Umm wow your poem almost made me cry...

  • 10 years ago

    by Krazikoko

    That was reeally intense. I was on the edge of my SEAT! Honest!
    Ur really good!

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittany Michelle

    *wide eyed * wow.. I can see the sorrow in your writng this is great