I really like this...you did a great job...very deep and descriptive! Great message too. keep it up!!!!!!! 5/5

This one is good!! short, sweet, and to the point.. i really liked it!!!!!!! probably my favorite yet.. keep it up! :o]

Another good poem for being short you certainly gave some one a lot to think about Plot121

Omg, I loved this poem so much. You're very talented.

Keep up the good work!!!

5/5

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Simply great but it's an excellent writing. Two thumbs up and 5/5 from me!!!

Another wow! your simply amazing.. it's short and meaningful with a nice message... kudos for you! =]

Oh my, this was amazing. You have a gift with knowing how to use your words, dear Peabody! And that is highly impressive, I must say :p.

From beginning, middle till the very end, this piece was over-flowing with powerful vocabulary and distinct images. I don't know if I can actually criticize this.

Hmm. An idea though. I do quite appreciate the way you've worded "24/7 the sun doesn't shine". However, I would suggest that you separate this line from the first five lines and the six lines that follow it. Also, you could place a full stop after the 7 and start the sentence with a capital letter; so it would read like this “24/7. The sun doesn’t shine.” This way you may just give the line a double meaning; which is in effect another poetic technique.

Gosh. I can't think of anything else. But, this was an intelligent write. Very, very well done dude :).
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I thought this was a great poem
it was short, but the words were
full of meaning and they were chosen
and peaced together
perfectley
a well deserved 5/5

Fantastically perched just on the very edge of the fence and miles ahead of all competition, a piece that reminds me why I should always turn the world on its head, if only in my mind, to ensure nothing sinister lurks beneath the couch cushions, the proceed with judgement.