Comments : Her Pain Caused Too Much

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The poem in it self was well written I enjoyed how you opened it and closed the whole thing but the message in my view was a a bit self serving. Great job on the description and creating the flow though Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Excellent poem. Wonderfully written. The structure was amazing. You had my attention at the start of the poem but when I got to all those lines without spaces, I got thrown off. Maybe you should put spaces in that section. I also loved the repetition in this poem; that's really effective in getting the readers attention.

    Good Job! 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • Wow, this poem left me speechless. It's really sad, yet very powerful. Great poem. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by Allison

    Your poem was great! I loved how you used repetition and the imagery was wonderful. You have a lot of talent. *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by Ash

    Excellent imagery flowing through this one and the style herein simply enhanced the pain that flowed through this poem. The beginning and ending was very different and caprtured my attention from the start till the very end. Keep it up (the writing off course - not self-harm)! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by she

    This poem told a very sad story, but it was written with so much talent

  • 15 years ago

    by Illusion

    No doubt 5/5

    the way you opened the poem
    water droplets
    clock time
    and used them back at the end of the poem.

    the spacing between lines made it more impressive.