Quite a morbid kind of poem. Well written though. Good job.
Greta x

Wow, so powerful! it was as if the words were cutting themselves into my flesh, making their mark so I would remember them forever. This was pure writing, and I can see that you have much talent for writing poetry! Good job!

Wow this is good

Perfectly devoid of emotion. I liked it.

Greatly written, truly creative piece, it posses very descriptive beauty and amount of originality. I overall enjoyed in this a lot, you created quite captivating atmosphere trough each line. Ending is very effective, you ended a poem so quickly and slowed down the rhythm hastenily which added so much power to the whole poem. Bravo!

I absolutely loved the fourth and last stanzas, but I would have thought the poem to be much better if you included punctuation in it. =]

A powerful poem.
very deep, yet beautiful.
wonderful job.
keep up the nice work!

Wow this poem is amazing! I liked it. 5/5 I loved how u worded it! Good job!

This poem is wonderful. The rhyming is really good, and it flows well, too. Your word choice is excellent. My favourite stanza is probably the third. It just holds the most emotion to me.

``Briana

I love this poem the most XD
Your so talented!

Wow. This poem was yet another excellent write. Your words are so powerful and they definatly bring sooo much saddness out! Imagery is amazing. Honestly, I wouldn't change this one either.. it's all worded perfectly.. xD 5/5

You have a good style and flow.
Its a little dark, but overall good.
Cheer up and be Happy!
lol

god bless.

This is such an amazing poem...keep up the great work

5/5

I really enjoyed this peice of writing the wording is so powerful and beautiful x

This poem is full of imagery
and although it is very dark,
i loved the flow and how everything fit so well together

keep it up :)

Wonderful, the flow was amazing and you wording was great, sad but great.

Fantastic poem! The flow was great
Words were meaningful, such a sad topic but a good poem!

=)

Crystal droplets falling
Crimson rivers flow
A silence eternally deafening
A beauty forever unknown
Perhaps change the last line to :
A beauty never known , it flows a little better .

Cries of pure torture
Screams of brutal pain
To walk among the living
Blind to those slain
Again the last line throws off the flow , another suggestion :
Blind to who've been slain

See right past distracts <- distractions ?
Look right through the lie
Mourn for those forsaken
As you lay to die
I'd add 'down' between lay and to in the last line .
I love the idea , and other than the slight flaws in the flow it was awesome , the rhymes and the wording were really well chosen .

Fantastic poem =)

Good work expressing what you feel keep it up