Comments : Turn the Time

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    This is really sad, I especially love the last four lines:

    "Now when I wish upon a shooting star,
    I wish I knew who you really are,
    Instead of this person you pretended to be
    when you looked me in the eye, loving me."

    They sum up the poem perfectly. The rhyme was great and although the flow was very occasionally disrupted, it didn't really matter. This is great =)

    5/5

    Em xXx

  • For a short poem, you done a good job.
    The imagery was clear and it flowed well.

    "Instead of this person you pretended to be
    when you looked me in the eye, loving me
    I liked those two lines the best.

    Keep writing, your talented.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    This is such a sad poem i really like it though and i can relate well to it

  • Very beautiful poem. I can totally relate to this since I used to have a place somethin like that with my ex who passed away, but anyway, back to the poem. It showed so much feeling, how something you think is so special, when in the end it can mean nothing. I loved it so much. Great job! This will definately go into my favs! 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.