Keep Holding On [Triquatrain]

by Sweet Fragility   Oct 29, 2007


In a world so small, I'm beginning to fall,
Not knowing how to deal with another day.
Seeing in black and white, wrong or right,
Learn to be content with shades of gray.

Look towards the sky, as life passes by,
Leaving behind a pale and broken sunset.
It is time to move on, the past is gone,
Say goodbye to strife and endless regrets.

Shoot for the skies, for tomorrow never dies,
Second chances come and go like seasons.
Keep holding on, because it's a new dawn,
Of searching for a place with light and reason.

The Triquatrain form was created by Robert L. Huntsman. It is a quatrain poem in tri-rhyme with a specific rhyming pattern (see below). Lines 1 and 3 have internal rhyme whereas lines 2 and 4 do not.

Rhyme Pattern:

(a,a)
b
(c,c)
b

. . . and so on.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Krathia

    Gorgeously done; the rhyming and rhythm of the poem was flawless. There were very minor problems with meters here and there, but nothing to fret over.

    "In a world so small, I'm beginning to fall,
    Not knowing how to deal with another day."
    Bold begining, it's great to start with something everyone can relate to. It urges them to keep reading.

    "Seeing in black and white, wrong or right,
    Learn to be content with shades of gray."
    Contrast and acceptance. Haven't seen that done before, but it turned out great!

    "It is time to move on, the past is gone,"
    Simple, but the message here rings clear.

    "Shoot for the skies, for tomorrow never dies,
    Second chances come and go like seasons."
    'skies' and 'tomorrow' are very hopeful words, so this stanza was your "brightest". Also, I liked how you incorporated 'seasons' into th poem, forthe readers amkes a link between hope and nature.

    "Keep holding on, because it's a new dawn,
    Of searching for a place with light and reason."
    'dawn' and 'light', again with the brightfulness and nature.

    Very impressive poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    Refreshingly beautiful, elegant and lyrical. A piece of hope in a dim world.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cheyanne

    Truly amazing poem!!! i fell in love with these verses:

    "Look towards the sky, as life passes by,
    Leaving behind a pale and broken sunset.
    It is time to move on, the past is gone,
    Say goodbye to strife and endless regrets."

    "Shoot for the skies, for tomorrow never dies,
    Second chances come and go like seasons.
    Keep holding on, because it's a new dawn,
    Of searching for a place with light and reason"

    beautiful write 5/5:)

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This is written in a good way, it is very deep and profound.
    I like the form that you picked, and your rhymes are very good.
    My favorite stanza is:

    -Shoot for the skies, for tomorrow never dies,
    Second chances come and go like seasons.
    Keep holding on, because it's a new dawn,
    Of searching for a place with light and reason.-

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow what a wonderful Triquatrain. I like the word choice and the flow of your poem. I just love the way you have written it 5/5 all the way

    tc
    Fsams

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