Overall a good poem. There were a few minor spelling errors, and though a bit of the poem was redundant, I felt the overall message was clear. You have talent and I am sure you will improve the more you write. Also, in my opinion you could watch the first person ( all of the I's used ) I noticed that in a couple of your poems and someone once told me that after you establish it once then anymore is overdoing it. Just be careful with that. I did enjoy your poems and believe you have talent, and I look forward to reading more of your work. If indeed your age is true then you may be far more talented beyond your years.

That was a really good poem and i liked it i liked how you set it up to