Comments : Hurt and despair

  • 11 years ago

    by Nigel Oliver

    A really sad poem, showing lots of emotion.

    She's right, how you repeated the first and third line in eac stanza was incredibly effective in expressing what you felt.

    I enjoyed this piece.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    This is also great. The emotion flowed very well!!! Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a very well written dark poem, It does make me sad that so many feel this way, but it is a worthy theme in dark poetry 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow. What an ending. Well, the emotion was deep and I felt your pain. But it seemed as if the poem was to repetitive, next time maybe switch it up a bit. Great job!

    Amber..

  • 11 years ago

    by Christina

    Wow very sad...but its a great poem!!!...

  • 11 years ago

    by SpEcIaLmE

    This poem is really good
    the repetition of the 1st and 3rd lines really gets the message across and makes the poem more powerful
    the first stanza really got my attention and was very effect
    the emotion was deep and made the poem that bit much better its very sad but amazing

    5/5