Comments : Drinking Away My Pain (Glosa Verse)

  • 16 years ago

    by Nigel Oliver

    Wow.

    This was amazingly descriptive, such imagery..

    I really liked it

    "My Ipod on full blast, music always takes away the pain.
    Blocking out the rest of the world, "ignorance is bliss;"

    i loved that stanza, this was really good 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Well, for one, you deff. kept my attention throughout this poem.
    Secondly, flow was a bit off, but overall, it came together nicely.
    Third, the emotions displayed were very raw and full-blown.
    Fourth, the depth you created was simply amazing.
    Finally, this was an awesome read.
    Good work and keep it up. (:

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    What a challenge...making a poem like this!
    You have done this very well, my congratulations.

    Take care,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    "Blocking out the rest of the world, "ignorance is bliss;"
    Pretending has always been my better talent."

    An effective and well written piece. For some reason the above two lines really called out to me, I don't quite know why. Lol. Nevertheless, the imagery was vivid and the structure was well kept. Well done. :)

    Just a thought: You could write the above line with brackets around the word 'better' - so that it looks like this:
    "Pretending has always been my [better] talent". I don't know, experiment! Haha :P

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Adfklgjasdl;jg.
    Oh my god, girl.
    I love it. (:
    My favorite poems, honestly.
    Glosa verse always seems a bit off flow, but somehow you pulled it off. It was iffy here and there, but that's just because of the big stanzas, I think. Most of them are, to me at least. But, this one was great.
    You did a wonderful job.
    I'm so proud of you. (:

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    What an incredibly written poem! I've heard of a glosa verse but never really knew what it was. I am truly impressed! I think I'm going to try to attempt one, but I know it will probably not come out as amazing as yours! 5/5 :D

  • 16 years ago

    by IfYouWantMe

    AWESOME!!! That's all I can say!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Awwz a sad poem......and another i can relate to!!!! great work!! keep it up! 5/5

    <3 i love you silly

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenVodkaBottle

    I lov this song.. by hinder my ex has turned like that (U)