Farewell, My Darling...

by Gem   Dec 18, 2007


The house feels so empty without you
Everything seems so out of place
You were always there to lean upon
To cuddle up to
Always so warm and inviting
You would cheer me up on my most miserable days
On my darkest nights. Never asked questions
When I fell on you and cried, you were there...
To cushion my fall
You would watch all the girly films with me
Let me hide behind you
When we watched the scary ones
Never complained when I was angry
And threw things at you
You were always there with open arms
You looked proud and touch
But you were soft inside, letting me fall asleep on you
Keeping me safe and warm
You were simply the best
Until the strain got too much, the wears and tears of life
Were getting you down
You were fading away, became so pale
So weak...
We both knew it was time for you to go
After fifteen years
This was goodbye
So farewell my darling sofa
You will be greatly missed.

*Gem*
Copyright©GemmaWhite2007

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  • 8 years ago

    by Teria

    The house feels so empty without you
    Everything seems so out of place
    [The house feels so empty without you
    everything's so out of place]
    - For some odd reason I wasn't fond with the usage of "seems" I think that it didn't connect well with the word "feel". Maybe because of the double -e? It's just my opinion, though.

    You were always there to lean upon
    To cuddle up to
    Always so warm and inviting
    [You were always there to lean upon,
    to cuddle up to, so warm and inviting]
    - The second line seemed a bit too short and the next line used 'always' again. And, it messed with the flow for me.

    Never complained when I was angry
    And threw things at you
    - I liked these lines. They make the poem original. I don't think I've ever read a poem where people apologized for throwing things at someone else. I'm sure they're out there, but I like the idea of it. Makes it a bit more direct. And, I like when people make poems direct, as long as they're not over doing it.

    You were always there with open arms
    You looked proud and touch
    [You were always there with open arms
    You looked proud and touchED]
    - I'm guessing you mean 'touched'. I'm not quite sure, but that's what I'm assuming by the lines before and after.

    You were fading away, became so pale
    [You were fading away, becoming so pale]
    OR
    [You were fading away, you became so pale.]

    Hahaha. I honestly did NOT expect the ending. I didn't even realize that it was under funny poems, which is odd because there's bright yellowing surrounding the loss of something. Fifteen years is a LONG time for a couch, I've seen them last 9 or 10 but not 15. You must take excellent care of your things. Which is good! (:

    Cute poem, Gem. Really cute.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Great entrance~

    The house feels so empty without you
    Everything seems so out of place
    You were always there to lean upon

    It's climatic. Nice poem, 5/5. Keep on writting.

  • 9 years ago

    by Natalie84

    You know what...I know this is a funny piece but it's something that is REALLY sad HAHAHA My family had these couches for a very long time and when it was time to get rid of them everyone was a little broken up about it.
    NICE!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    I have to admit you got me! I`m sitting here thinking "OH NO" her and the guy in the picture broke up and they seemed so perfect......Great job,perfect ending.

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Hehehe... great poem... at first I was like oh no she's leaving him... and then its a sofa and I laughed sooo hard... lol