Caution; I Might Just Fall In Love

by ABake   Dec 29, 2007


Sometimes what is wrong ends up being oh so right;
I am caught up in fear and my heart won't calm down-
Your arms around me bring security I've never known,
This is a time to forget about it all; It's just you and I...

[Sweetheart, pause, inhale- now exhale quickly-]
Tell me do you smell the beautiful aroma of love?
I am beginning to believe it is getting to my head,
Caution- I may do a strange thing like fall in love...

Stars are shining solely for us, not a thing in our way,
My heart is adapting so please don't leave me alone...
[Time passes by and to my surprise you are still here-]
The fear I once felt is subsiding with each passing day.

You broke the lock on my heart, threw it on the floor,
Don't promise me anything, just take it day by day;
Things are running smoothly, no bumps in the road-
So tell me once more, can you smell the aroma of love?

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  • 16 years ago

    by MusoXDanielle

    Really feel the emotion in this poem!
    Loved it!

    Danielle
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh my I just loved this Amber! I love the titles your every one of your poems ... they really capture my attention and make me excited to read the poem.

    When the poem started out, a thought popped into my head ... this would make an amazing song. As I continued reading I was reading the words as if lyrics and even added my own tune to them which made it even more exciting to read.

    You took an overused topic and truly made it you own which is a hard task to do. I loved your word choice and everything just flowed beautifully. Everything about it was amazing.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Ultimately, this poem was incredible and I enjoyed it. There are a few spots that could have some touch-ups syllabication-wise for the flow, but other than that I saw few errors.
    I especually loved the last three words, "aroma of love" nice word choice

    =]

    not a thing in our way, = not a thing that's in our way

    Overall, good job.
    Rereading it, I think you could add one syllable to each line to make it flow better =]

    ~Stevie

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Gosh all ur poems i've read so far i can relate to lol!!! keep up the great work!!!

    <3 i love you silly

  • 16 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    First things first, Awh. :]
    It made me WANT to read on, & I'm defiantly not a fan of love poems, But you did really well.

    "Caution- I may do a strange thing like fall in love..."

    My favourite line out of the whole poem, Even though I think the stanza it was in didn't flow correct.

    "[Sweetheart, pause, inhale- now exhale quickly-]
    Tell me do you smell the beautiful aroma of love?
    I am beginning to believe it is getting to my head,
    Caution- I may do a strange thing like fall in love..."

    Repeating "Love" didn't work for me, Maybe if you rearrange the sentence so "love" doesn't fall last twice.
    Might just be me, But it threw me off.

    Other than that I loved it.
    Twas sweet. :]

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