Fall to pieces

by Cotton Candy Clouds   Dec 29, 2007


Frustrated because I can't tell if it's real.
Please tell me this wasn't all a game.
Mad because I don't know how you feel.
I don't want to put out this flame.

Envious of her lips on yours.
Do you think of me when they are?
Miserable at the thought of these never ending wars.
I just know you are going to leave the worst scar.

Bleak without my other half.
Please just come back!
Worried never again will I hear you laugh.
I can feel my heart of glass beginning to crack.

Confused because you said you'd always wait.
Just tell me now, am I wasting my time?
Curious, is this just one of those twisted fates?
Will you really never again be mine?

Upset because we can't make it right.
But still all I wish for is this relationship to last.
Sad because I need you day and night.
I don't want you to become my past.

Angry because you won't take my hand.
I know you hear me begging you, just please.
Aggravated because you don't understand.
This pain is spreading like a disease.

Disappointed because we can't be together.
Baby face it it's not just the distance
But still I'll love you forever.
All through my existence.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Frustrated because I can't tell if it's real.
    Please tell me this wasn't all a game.
    Mad because I don't know how you feel.
    I don't want to put out this flame.

    Its like being stuck in a web of love.
    I have this quote on my page
    "Why is it that someone can shatter your heart and you still love them with all the little pieces"
    ^^thats very true love does a funny thing to us all, don't you agree?
    Your objectives were strong like always. Great job. To me you are now known as a "strength writer" If you're not talking about being strong in actions, you are using strong emotions.
    5/5
    laura

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Very good poem. I could feel the emotions as I read it. The wording was good and so was the flow. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 9 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    "Frustrated because I cant tell if its real"
    > "cant" should be "can't"
    "i can feel my heart of glass begining to crack"
    >"begining" should be "beginning"
    "Just tell me now, am i waisting my time?
    Curious, is this just one of those twisted faits?"
    > "waisting" should be "wasting"
    > "faits" should be "fates"
    "Baby face it its not just the distance"
    > "its" should be "it's"

    There are a few places where you need to capitalize your "I"'s.

    Other than those mistakes, you're all good. Nice write.
    *Chaotic Angel*

  • 9 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Omg, I thought this poem was so freakin great & we loved it very much. Keep up the good work (5/5)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Bleak without my other half
    please just come back
    Worried never again will i hear you laugh
    i can feel my heart of glass begining to crack

    ^^^^When you are able to say that: please just come back, then you know it is real love.
    If it wasn't you would not think twice about a man who has already kissed another girl.
    Very good poem, you have put into words very well how you feel about this:)

    Take care!

    Ingrid 5/5