The I have is a little too much
but it still works
it's not too overpowering
the emotion was excellent
flow was good
vocab was good
this poem was really nice
I enjoyed it
5/5
kaila

This poem is very well written. I like the choice of words and format, it delivers the contents and meaning in an outstanding way

That is really beautiful

Very niice
it had a niice flow to it! and idk lol but i rele liiked it!! keep it up!

<3 i love you silly

Wow, not many people can pull of poems like this. The image I got from this fit just right and th flow was just perfect. Very great word usage. It was really good. 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

I liked it, it was interesting to read, and the word choice was vast and especially made the poem more interesting and enjoyable to read. Beautifully written, keep writing!

Amazing poem, though I normally don't like poems that don't rhyme, this one is really something! I really like the pattern of the poem and love how it ended, such a great job! Rated it a 5 btw ^_^

I REALLY LIKE!!!!! :D idk what to day, this is lovely. i mean excuse me for being this way, but i think i'm inlove...

.. NO you idiot not with you, the poem

An amazing poem .
an attention grabber for me .
from start to finish .
the emotion here was greatly expressed .
and very well captured .
great write . 5/5 .

I loved the emotion first off. Your word choice and metaphors were out of this world. Lol. Umm, one thing that kind of bothered me was the "I have" it seemed to drag on after a while. Maybe that is because I am not one for repition but...

My favorite stanza>>

I am stuck in the endless webs of jealousy, the never-ending tangle
I have been unwillingly clung to its silk and left to crumble
I am stuck in the endless webs of resentment, the never-ending tangle
Where I have felt the emotion, heard the emotion and seen the emotion
........For all I know the emotion is me
But I. Am not. The emotion

I loved it. The only thing, was the last line the periods in between words kind of threw me off, just minor though. Maybe you wanted it to be read with a pause or something. I am not sure. Also, you used "the never ending tangle" more than once in that stanza. I love the line but its kind of overplayed. Lol. But other than that an overall amazing peice. Great job!

Amber :]]

I found that enjoyable to read. It was interesting.

Wow, i loved this. excellent job.

I liked the repetition i think it added emotion and keep it going. It was a great poem and then when u reached the end it became an AWESOME poem :] very well done!
Taegan Emily
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It is a well writen poem. The word choice was very vast and inthrailing. I liked the way it reels you in and at the end simply leaves you to wonder.

I dont mean to sound like a critic, because by no means am i, but i think if you simply tried to make it ryme...if only just a little it would be spectacular.

5/5
Alexander

Loved it...5/5

Very profound piece. Shows you to be a strong-willed person. I really liked the way this 'emotion' drew you in, but you won't let it completely defeat you. It's a motivational piece. Good job!
*ME*

Wow this is amazing the flow is veryy even i like it alot =]]