Wow, this is also great poem...
Very touchful and I really impressed with this part

And forgive my dark thoughts,
As I take me a few more shots.
Save me from lacerations,

Well done!!! 5/5 for sure

Wow... i can totally realate to this.
this is amazing...wow..5/5 :D keep it up x

Wow.
I actually liked this, at first I was like . . . hmm, The Lord's Prayer made into something sad/dark.

But, I actually like how you did this, because you didn't make it all ... odd or anything. It was written flawlessly, with still the same need and desire for help as a prayer should have.
The whole emotion with it was amazing and flawless.

You've done a wonderful job here.
xD
Keep it up
5.5