Love never lost

by janiL   Jan 6, 2008


Who am i
to tell you that i love you
limpid crystals drip from my eyes
yet who am i really
to strip you of your lies
to reminisce
was it yesterday?
or fifty years ago
i can't recall
but even so
i couldn't have known you'd let me go
once
you told me of your affection unhinged and true
and never once
did i ever feel
my adoration wrongly due
even though
all woe and grief now touch me
i will remain faithful
to but your living memory
heinous are you
who only, could cause such sorrow
yet this tender torture i not curse
and still choose not let go
for horrid are you
for you alone could have ever
make my wits and actions
to foolish love
surrender
distress
despair
and agony
how shattering for one with pride like mine
but readily i bow
my heart to you consign
why? i ask
myself do i torment
for only with you
was i blithesome and content
i confess
for all the pain you've pierced me deep
i all withstand
and in my heart keep
for your words are sweetest
and your guise ever dear
goodbye
once i said
but still to you adhere
i was happy
now miserable
but i contest none of it
it's destiny's fault that i
to you was unrightly fit
and so
who am i indeed
to tell you that i love you so?
i am a lover
calling unto a lost love, calling your name,
just to say i love you
i can, but i won't, ever let you go

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow! Unique poem, this isn't typical love poem which is great, I admire your idea for this piece, totally remarkable and interesting.

    I have just two suggestions, first i really leaves a bad impression on me when it isn't written I, i want to say i=I

    Second, with a use of punctuation, you could create a poem that is more easy to read and punctuation can also help you to make a rhythm in some part more intense.

    I love this random thoughts and broken lines! I think that you written this poem excellently, (you deserves 5/5 and all that) also I must say bravo! I enjoyed in every line.

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    This is a very cute poem, but I didn't really like the structure of it. I think it will look better if it were put into stanzas, it shows more feeling like that. I loved it the imagery in this though. It's a good poem.

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Beautiful emotion and thoughts but the flow wasnt good enough! but though i still love the message coz its kinda sweet and inspiring 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I like the word choice and the free flow in this well written poem, the passion conveyed is really outstanding

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    This was phenomenal! Truly powerful with so much pure emotion! I loved your choice of words, and your message was so clear. This was a brilliant write! Keep up the amazing work!

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