Comments : Damn you, Time

  • 9 years ago

    by Noelle Wright

    Awh what a sad yet depressing story... Time does change to fast but you never really realize it... I'm only 16 but the music these days just cant compare to back then..!!!
    5/5

    Noelle*Wright

  • 9 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Truly deep and powerful poem from the beginning to the end. I like the topic and I can relate to some thoughts from this piece. You created good flow in every stanza and did really good job with rhymes. Capitalization of T in time is very clever and effective, it gives interesting tone to the poem. Whole atmosphere of this piece is great.
    The second and the last stanzas are my favorite.

    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • 9 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    Wow, i think all the time, i wish i could go back to certain events in my life! you have written this so well. I love it. The flow was great and the language was appropriate and added to the power of the poem.

    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 9 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    I totally agree with this poem.. time makes things go by so fast.. this poem is very sad in away.. but i liked it very much.. keep up the good work

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The rhyme, the flow and the theme are just outsanding. I love this poem

  • 9 years ago

    by Blissful

    Wow I Just loved this! The message was one I could relate with. We all sometimes wish we can back to the times when we were happy and smiling. It was deep and each word held an immense amount of power. The flow was flawless and the imagery was clear in my mind. I loved your choice of words and overall it was a joy to read.

  • 9 years ago

    by jLegendc

    I've always wanted to write a poem about how i hate time... this poem is really true... time always changes everything.. everyone can relate to this.. anywayz.. the poem was flawless.. it has long lines and also rhymes.. that's very unique.. and lastly i want to say is i hate u for writing a poem about time.. haha it was my idea.. lol jks.. gReat job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Birgit

    Wow, impressive. You know, this really sounds like lyrics though, I bet you could make a song out of this. (If you make it a little longer of course) That would be really cool =] Anyway, nice flow & goooood subject to write a poem about =]
    5/5
    x

  • 9 years ago

    by The Queen

    Woah...excellent...i do wish too..damn you, time...hihihih..5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by steve

    Beautiful poem, very true, I remember the group back in highschool, we still talk like once or twice a year but everyones moved and some are married, some have children, some have died, and some are already old and just burntout, at 15 you dont realize what you got and cant wait to get older and now in our mid twenties we put on an old cd and drift into a daydream of back in the day before bills and stresses, to smiles and laughter. anyways sorry to ramble on but your poem struck a chord... im adding you to my favs

  • 9 years ago

    by steve

    Beautiful poem, very true, I remember the group back in highschool, we still talk like once or twice a year but everyones moved and some are married, some have children, some have died, and some are already old and just burntout, at 15 you dont realize what you got and cant wait to get older and now in our mid twenties we put on an old cd and drift into a daydream of back in the day before bills and stresses, to smiles and laughter. anyways sorry to ramble on but your poem struck a chord... im adding you to my favs

  • 9 years ago

    by Tammie

    Oh how we all wish for that.
    I think everyone could relate to this in one way or another, and I love the way you wrote it. The flow was flawless and the questions you asked really spoke to me as I read through this. The rhyming was good, not boring and the emotion fluid. I sure know how you feel. Well done. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 9 years ago

    by XxAlysxX

    Wow this poem made me think back to all of my old friends that i don't talk to anymore.:( I love this poem, the way it's written is great.5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Happy without a reason

    Love this poem.... really remind me of my past

  • 9 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is beautiful...I love this. So moving and bittersweet and full of so many conflicting emotions all at the same time.

    "I'm living in the past, a time when things were better,
    Reminiscing over friends, reading every love letter.
    Old familiar songs bring me back to tears,
    Making me wish I could go back just a few years."

    ^^What a truly beautiful opening, I found this to be beautifully written, and it set such a wonderful tone for the rest of the poem.

    "Reverse your stubborn hands and bring me back to Then.
    The days that bring a smile and make me ask - "Remember when?"
    The days I'm living here and now, they just don't compare,
    and if I had one wish, it would be to take me back to There."

    ^^I LOVE this stanza, this was just perfect. You managed to pack in so much depth and emotion in these few lines, and at times the emotion was overwhelming for me as the reader, yet you managed to keep it from becoming overbearing.

    So many people will be able to relate to this poem, and the changes that time brings to us all.

    Your flow in this was okay throughout, but I think it would have been better if you eliminated some of the filler words (The, I etc) Erase those and you'll be surprised how much smoother the flow becomes. I would have liked to see more imagery in the piece, but apart from those minor things, I enjoyed this very much, and it's certainly a piece that tugs on the reader's heartstrings.

  • 9 years ago

    by Joe

    Wow! Really captures many peoples thoughts and brings them into life. Great poem

  • 9 years ago

    by El

    This poem moved me to tears!
    I feel like this every day and the way you have written is amazing. I love this poem. I can really relate to it.
    =) 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by shantavia

    This is a really good poem i love it

  • 9 years ago

    by FallingAngel

    Time changes everything and everyone wishes it would stand still, you expressed the need for time to halt excelently, great poem.5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Pesamenteiro

    So true...too true.
    The last two lines of the second last verse didn't rhyme, (my friend pointed that out) I didn't notice it, it flowed too well ^.^