Interesting and intense piece.
I have a few suggestions: You should capitalize I in some places and revise the punctuation of the whole piece. The emotions in the whole poem are expressed in a good way. You did good job with rhymes, but they seem forced on some places.
All in all, good job.
Keep writing!

Well i dont think a capital "I" makes a poem...it was a great piece reguardless of the capitalization or the rhyme scheme..
keep writing! i love your work

Great Poem. I too pick physical pain over emotional pain. I would die if i could just have the one i loved all to myself for a couple days. It'd make it all worth while