Welcome to my hell

by Poetic Ninja aka Papachopchop   Jan 15, 2008


What is happening to me,
In this reality of mine?
The darkness and my soul,
Have become intertwined.

Ashes to Ashes,
And dust to dust,
My soul is but a shell,
Of what it once was.

I feel out of place,
This isn't the way it should be,
I want to smile again,
I am begging on my knees.

This just seems like so much,
I feel I'm about to break,
I just don't know,
How much more of this I can take.

Someone hear my cry!
Help me if you can!
My soul has dried up,
And become a wasteland.

The only peace I see now,
Comes with my death,
And the chaos will end,
When I take my last breath.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Asdgasgd
    I
    LOVE
    IT.

    Like, darling you have no idea.
    It's amazing
    Seriously
    You have such talent
    YOUHAVETALENT!

    : D
    i love it.
    flawless
    completely xD

  • 16 years ago

    by Meme

    Really sad poem
    I really hope that you feel better
    great one again 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    -This just seems like so much,
    I feel I'm about to break,
    I just don't know,
    How much more of this I can take.
    -
    This stanza totally throw me off, I think the rhyming seems absolutely forced and the choice of words could be so much better. That is of course just my opinion.

    Anyway other than that great work. I love the way you expressed emotions, and it is original. All in all the first time I read this poem I didn't like it at all but now I read it the second time.

    -
    What is happening to me,
    In this reality of mine?
    The darkness and my soul,
    Have become intertwined.-
    Excellent stanza, I really like it, very descriptive and nice rhyme.

    -Ashes to Ashes,
    And dust to dust,
    My soul is but a shell,
    Of what it once was.-
    Very impressing lines, I love them, they have amazing tone and nice choice of words.
    Anyway now I really like this poem, effective ending, well done. I think that it could be even better if you improve the fourth stanza.

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