-This just seems like so much,
I feel I'm about to break,
I just don't know,
How much more of this I can take.
-
This stanza totally throw me off, I think the rhyming seems absolutely forced and the choice of words could be so much better. That is of course just my opinion.

Anyway other than that great work. I love the way you expressed emotions, and it is original. All in all the first time I read this poem I didn't like it at all but now I read it the second time.

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What is happening to me,
In this reality of mine?
The darkness and my soul,
Have become intertwined.-
Excellent stanza, I really like it, very descriptive and nice rhyme.

-Ashes to Ashes,
And dust to dust,
My soul is but a shell,
Of what it once was.-
Very impressing lines, I love them, they have amazing tone and nice choice of words.
Anyway now I really like this poem, effective ending, well done. I think that it could be even better if you improve the fourth stanza.

Really sad poem
I really hope that you feel better
great one again 5/5

Asdgasgd
I
LOVE
IT.

Like, darling you have no idea.
It's amazing
Seriously
You have such talent
YOUHAVETALENT!

: D
i love it.
flawless
completely xD