I truely enjoyed this poem. The emotion portrayed behind each word was heart braking. You took me to a place filled with so much pain, so much agony. Your word choice was really descriptive and vivid, I like that alot. Instead of basic simple words you stepped out of every day vocabulary to create such an intense poem. The flow to me was in in some places caused by changes of rhyme scheme maybe. I know this piece is written for a contest so good luck with that. A deep and meaningful piece of poetry drenched in painful emotion. I loved it and enjoyed each line. Well done. ~Mel