I loved the title, it really captured my attention! Wow I just loved this piece! It has to be one of the best I have read by you! Each word was so powerful and held such an immense amount of meaning for me that I just felt my heart melt. Each description was written so beautifully that I was lost in your words. Ahh I just loved this piece! Best poem I have read in a long while. The saddness in the last stanza really hit home with me and it was so unexpected but just beautiful. well done *5/5*

Wow, so short but yet full of emotoion. i loved the way u was happy in the beginin and i never seen the ending coming this way. great poem

You captured the emotion here perfectly! i can feel the emotion you put into this poem. and your words are so powerful and breath taking. This poem is simply too amazing for words alone. I don't even think there's a word in the universe that could possibly describe how incredibly amazing and awesome i thinkthis poem is! lol. :]] another great write. 5/5.

I usually don't like short poetry but this one was so full of emotion that it managed to grab and keep my attention from the title to the very last word. The last stanza was pleasantly unexpected and sad but it totally made the poem amazing.5/5 ^_^

<3Amber

Usually I can chose which stanza I like the most but in this case all were great and the last line was the saddest great job!

This was interesting, definitly. First off i'll start with the title, it was eye capturing, simple but effective. Loved it. The story and meaning portrayed throughout this poem was great, I liked the crush thing you had going on here. I love how you contrasted lust and loss together, it was quite effective and the flow of this was spot on. Nice word choice. Great poem. Overall a good read. 5/5 ~Mel

Very nicely written. I enjoyed the form and style of the poem as well as your word choice. However, there are some grammar issues that hinder the flow and feel of the poem. last stanza, second line seems a bit cliched... just an observation. Keep up the good work

Short and meaningful with bursting emotions that can melt someone's heart! nice poem.. i really like it! =]

The ending took me by surprise, I really didn't expect it too end that way! But it just made me love it more.
Short, Filled with emotions, and flowed flawlessly.

Well done,
--Elly

I really like it. it shows alot of emotion, and a sense of longing for this person. I would have like to be a bit longer, but i like what you wrote 5/5

Oh. Wow. That was... incredible. You have truly blown me away with this one. It held so much emotion in it, and it was so intense! The flow was flawless, and you nailed the word choice to perfection.

"Fogging memory, forget everything,
Nervous, shaking from the intensity."

-shiver- I love love love that couplet. xD
Beautiful job, m'dear. Overall: 5.5

-- Steph.

Wow... that was so well written. Your choice of words... every line left me breathless. There was so much emotion! Amazing job.

Connecting souls with only one glance,
Puckering lips I dream about you,
Fogging memory, forget everything,
Nervous, shaking from the intensity.

I love the whole poem, but that stanza just captivated me! It was beautiful!

Wow that was the quickest love story ive ever read=D..i was enjoying the first few stanzas and it broke my heart in the end..it was unexpected but i absolutely love the whole poem...

I think everyone can relate and yeah it happened to me too..i was like totally into this guy and i thought he likes me too but then i found out he was jus being friendly nuthin more nuthin less and i was a lil disappointed..oh well..Good job..5/5

Really relate to this...its very good

Ohh... but what happens after that? Details please! lol... Great write... very deep and emotional. And so well-written. As a writer I truly respect you... and am kinda envious *evil smile* 5/5