That was really good...i enjoyed it so much. i love the ending it kind of leaves you breathless. 5/5

An unusual topic but it makes sense. I liked it. The wording is very good. 5/5

I like this poem very much. The metaphor is excellent and the whole piece is filled with greatly expressed sadness. You created very vivid imagery and that made this piece even more powerful. Shot yet very effective poem.
Keep up!

Very impressing poem, it is deep and sorrowful, I love it, it posses refreshing originality and you wrote it on simply superb way.
Well done, effective piece truly, I like the form of it, it is very descriptive and it has some excellent randomness.
I love the way you wrote it, well done.

I like it because it can be interperited so many different ways.
once again, i really like it.
def. a 5/5
keep it up!