Comments : Faithless Road to Redemption.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexander

    This poem has an amazing flow. In the first stanza i was completely drawn in by your use of words. Unlike most poems that begin strong and end weak this one was strong tell the very end. It is a very inchanting and magnificent piece. Keep up the good work. 5/5

    Signed,
    Alexander

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I really liked this poem. You used imagery really well, especially in the last stanza about the pink lace etc. I also liked how you put "A quiet day" and "Real; not quite." apart from the rest, it really makes them stand out.
    On another note, I think the poem leaves off abruptly, and I think it could have been a bit more focused on examples of regrets rather than just one at the end.
    All in all, nice poem. 4/5 =]

  • This poem was a bit better than the one before. Although the imagery was quite good, it did show a bit.

    "Circling the pink lace embedded in my
    summer dress; eyes in innocence mourned for acceptance.
    I'll only remember, now, the tender hand of my
    Mother grace the locks that sat sound on
    my shoulders on a lukewarm, spring day."

    ^This was my fav stanza from the poem, which did show a good imagery. Good job!

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    When I read the first stanza I didn't see where this was headed, but once I finished this, and read it again, I loved it. The story you told within these words is beautiful, yet sad at the same time.

    The first stanza begins the story very nicely, with desperation in the words and a nice rhythm held in them too. I like how the last three lines rhyme, they work very well.

    The second stanza is small, yet it adds that extra bit of detail to this poem, I like it.

    Now the final stanza, I enjoyed this one most. The detail in your descriptions created gorgeous imagery here. I can literally imagine this happening. The final line there finished it nicely.

    I really enjoyed this piece. Overall you used great vocab, and a not so formatted style, yet it was very appropriate for this poem. Excellent piece. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Ahh highly enjoyable. I loved it mainly because it wasn't one of those overdone cliche poems I see so much. It was unique and meaningful.

    The imagery was very nice and tied the whole poem together in a picture perfect way. It flowed gently and effectively together all in a compact, but refreshing, package. job well done 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I just loved how flawlessly the whole poem flowed. It truly hooked me in and had me wanting more. Another poem that holds an immense amount of depth and lingers with the leader long after they have read it. It was filled with meaning and unique. It's refreshing to read some new poetry once in a while because most of the time they are about the same thing. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This is very interesting. I've never seen a poem that was put like this. I mean you see the razor blade-emo stuff and the oh-my-gosh-i-love-you stuff.. but yours is unique. I enjoyed reading it .. thanks :)

    This is my favorite part:

    Is it too late to turn around and
    see clear through the led printed perfection;
    a dying reflection?
    Faithless road to redemption...

    Excellent Job

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by limp

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