Hey, thanks for your comments !

this one is great, i really like it !

i'll be reading the rest soon :D

- Fahd

I really liked this poem! you have talent.. keep it up :)

That is an awesome poem.

I liked this one, it has emotion behind it. love it.good job

Love this one I can understand what you mean in it very nice keep it up

I found the poem a bit confusing.
and the part that confused me is that i do't know which girl was grabbed by the waist by the guy. Whether the other girl or her.

Because you are stating that she is wondering so you use the I or me.
Later on, you talk about a girl. so I thought that you might have to be referring to her through the rest of the poem. Rather than the first gal.

But what i think you were trying to say was that the girl was having the a great time just to find out that it was a dream. She was dreaming of being alone yet she sees this guy approaching her and she is shock because there was another girl and he choice her over the other.

Correct me if I'm wrong. I would appreciate it.