No Way Out

by Sweet Disposition   Jan 26, 2008


I can't describe this feeling,
It's a never-ending ache
My innocence is peeling,
For made clear is my mistake

You block out what I'm saying,
For you've heard these cries before
The price, you keep on paying,
For you could not love me more

You ask me why I'm crying?
For you just don't understand,
"It's killed me all this lying!"
I scream as you raise your hand...

You send my body sailing,
As you smash me to the ground
You're deafened by my wailing,
Then left begging for a sound

You gawp at me, just laying,
Then you give me a little shake
For my life, you are now praying,
You gasp, I finally wake

You've got so good at faking,
For no-one would ever know
That inside you are breaking,
'Cause you just can't let me go

You say this is the ending,
But your voice is filled with doubt
Your heart's in need of mending,
'Cause you're hooked; there's no way out

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  • 8 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I liked the narrative in this piece. It was very good, and very real, with certain things like
    ‘You block out what I'm saying,
    For you've heard these cries before
    The price, you keep on paying,
    For you could not love me more’
    and
    ‘You send my body sailing,
    As you smash me to the ground
    You're deafened by my wailing,
    Then left begging for a sound’
    The first of these two stanzas (stanza two in your piece) is my favourite of all. Not only is it so real, but I particularly like the last two lines of it ‘The price, you keep on paying’ because I just like what you’ve done, and I find it clever, and ‘For you could not love me more’ for its tone, and delivery.

    Brad

    P.S. Thanks for your comments on my poem ‘These Stars Are Our Stars’. I do usually try to make my rhymes as clever and unexpected as possible.

  • 9 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    Excellent write....terrible that in it the male resorts to violence.but I loved it:)

  • 9 years ago

    by Katie

    I love this one. Has a great flow to it. Thanks so much for the comment. =]

  • 9 years ago

    by Sweet As Sugar

    Amazing !!

  • 9 years ago

    by kaitlyn s

    This is really good.