WOW! So very twisted.... :) The flow and rhyme of this piece are excellent. The first stanza, i thought the words were put just so that it sounded a little forced, but the rest of the piece was very well done.
A very nicely written piece. The second I read the first stanza I knew I just HAD to read the rest! The beginning was amazing. Your choice of words were nice and you flow in the beginning and end were really good. A little rocky in the middle, but still an outstanding poem! You're an amazing poet and your work is too amazing for words! :]
"I can't describe this feeling,
It's a never-ending ache
My innocence is peeling,
For made clear is my mistake"
OMG!!!!! I'm so glad you commented my poem so that I could find this one that you've written. It's really awesome!!! The feeling and the flow just pieced it together so nicely. Great choice of words. You have a lot of talent. PLEASE keep writing and dont ever let anyone put your poetry down. You have a gift and you should always write for yoursefl, not for other people. 5/5