This is a very creative and beautiful poem. The imagery was perfect and the flow was magnificent. I was captivated also by your choice of wording. You took a poem that could have turned out to be a cliche' and turned it into something immaculate. You have done a wonderful job on this one. The only suggestion that I is punctuation, but in this case I really didn't need it to understand the concept. Keep up the great work!

Letty

Enjoyable to read... very nicely written... keep writing.