Comments - Woud you like to hear a secret.

ibleedregret ( F ) at 2008-07-18

I love this poem, Its so well writen,
good work hunni =]

xoxo

Serena ( P ) at 2008-07-18

Extremely well written. 5/5 all the way. Beautiful job =)

Moucha ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-19

Mmm , waht a peace of poem , relaly good expressed one ,
it is the first one i read and i dont mind that their is no rhyming ,

your flow of events, and feelings, jsut capture my attention and i still keep reading , and reading
jsut very good one ,

indeed, good

and in a another hand , i dont know what depress you but i hope you dotn cut for it ,
you see yoursefl did cut fix the prob?
i hope you listen to voice of reason , depression is bad, try to get away from it:)

XcLaIrEX ( F P C ) at 2008-07-20

I can relate, i love it 5/5

HvN ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-22

Can definitley relate, great job!

Finding myself at 2008-07-23

This poem is really good
i feel the same way sometimes

Zara Baines ( C ) at 2008-07-24

Very nicely written

Jenna at 2008-07-24

I Can Relate Too This Soooo Muchh (:
Really Goodd.

HEBA ( F C D ) at 2008-07-24

Wow,totally loved this piece.It is the same thing that I am suffering from, I have been hiding my sadness and depression for along time and I am sick and tired of this.

twistedsoul ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-24

Im utterly SPEECHLESS.................................................................................................................................................................................................okay this poem is beautiful i know how it feels to always hide and pretend that everything is alright you expressed emotion wonderfully this poem is going in my fav! 5/5

Craig Morris at 2008-07-25

It says how I have felt so well, wanting to tell everyone im not the happy clown, but at the same time wanting to tell nobody.
amazing xx

XxAnd I Almost Had YouxX ( F P C ) at 2008-07-25

Very nice.
keep up the good work.

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ALmostHadYou

Invisible Heartache ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-25

This was beautifully written. The whole poem

"Would you like to hear a secret,
Something I'll bet you never knew,
A secret deep inside me,
I've been hiding it from you."

My favorite stanza, and also true. Shes hiding something from everyone, something no on knows.

"Do you see this smile,
So huge upon my face,
My eyes are big and sparkling,
Everything seems in its place."

This was also very good. Rhyming was good, and shows shes a good actor. xD

"I'll bet you didn't know,
As I close my bedroom door,
There's something I've been hiding,
I let out as I fall to the floor."

She lets out all her emotions when she is alone, breaking down when no one can see. good.

"You can't hear my silent sobs,
Or see the cuts I make,
You don't know the things I do,
When I don't have to be fake."

No one sees the pain shes in, and nothing she does. She has a fake mask that everyone has bought.

"The secret I've been hiding,
The one that I hide best,
I never wanted you to worry,
Mother, I'm horribly depressed."

Now I think I like this stanza the best. Because she tells her mother, instead of friend or what ever, the wording was superb and just excellent.

I loved the whole poem, and it was just wonderful. You obviously have my vote. I hope you do as well on your others as you did this one!! Keep it up!!

5/5

Crippled Wing ( F P C ) at 2008-07-25

Wow this is a wonderful poem!!!

Tia xOxO i dont think you get it ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-06

Awe =[
thats sad. but really good........its going into my favs.

great rhyming! =]

5/5

~tia

Princess Emmi ( F C ) at 2008-08-13

Wow i love it i can totally relate to it.
fantasticly written, this is amazing work!!!!

Adrianna at 2008-08-13

This is a really good poem....

chanel at 2008-08-14

Wow, i reallly liked this, it was moving, and i dont really want to admit it but my eyes got watery as i read the last four lines. im really glad i read it.

maya raphael at 2009-02-05

This is really deep and very nicely written:]

AnCi ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-14

Amazing poem! And I can remember feeling this way myself :( All the cuts and cries for help that no one ever really hears.. Amazing poem!


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