Comments : My letter from this cage called home

  • 13 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    Wow, that was a very good write.
    It's a poem, a letter and you're able to write all this staying in this 'personas' character, being a prisoner. I imagine almost a Rapunzel kind of scene, and a crude and cruel father.
    Wonderfully written.

    However there were some cliches that were evident here that made the poem a little more predictable than I would have liked. Like in these places:
    "Screaming, accusing,and anger is all i see
    These chains are not letting go of me

    Someone help me, I'm in despair
    But help in here is very rare"

    But at the same time, I loved this stanza:
    "There is one main creature
    Who feeds on my depression
    he has two wicked features
    His foolish ignorance and aggression"

    Keep on writing. Hope to read more from you soon~ ;)