Countess of Monte Cristo ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-13
Whether negative or positive, i felt a sense of calm and serenity through this write. Carefree, unexpecting, unjaded style.
This is a different write from all your other writes, Rob, but as good as the rest.
Quiet Insanity ( F C D )
at 2009-10-13
Your use of metaphors are by far the best I have ever read. This poem is exceptional. No matter what the theme, its touched with beauty and sadness.
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-13
Rob
What a wonderful heart touching piece.
Fall, take each leaf as you go,
Leave not one behind.
At least, I feel the splendor
Before you are unkind.
Love the imagery in this poem. To be able to feel something before it is taken from you. Gives you that memory to hold in your heart.
Strip me down to nothing,
All is yours to keep.
Cold winds no longer scare me,
For now, my roots sink deep.
In this I get the feeling of it doesn't matter what happens you can't be hurt anymore then you already have been. Your soul has been stripped, but with this being done it has allowed you to stand stronger,
Winter will give no mercy,
Only ice and snow,
But as is the way of seasons,
All stay awhile, then go.
Here is a feeling of nothing will matter much anymore. That you have become use to the feelings of things leaving you.
Waiting, I will stretch my limbs
Upwards toward the sky.
Showing faith nature will send
Springtime, bye and bye.
Eventualy your heart will warm once more.
Later, summer brings a gift
Of breezy, gentle nights.
Yet, I yearn to start all over
To have fall hold me tight.
A new beginning always comes. Yet we still long for what was lost.
~clapping~
Love Cindy
Sylvia A ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-14
Rob, a different style for you but as usual it is excellent. It is somewhat sad but parts have hope and joy. Your words moved through the seasons with ease and it seems Fall would be your favorite. Well done again.
Princess Fiona ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-14
One thing I have noticed about your poems is the pain of loss and yet the acceptance of it. Also the pleasure you found when love was there. If I don't have this all confused :]
Your poems are always the best, touching in every way and delightful to read.
*+*+*
Melody
The Bonnie Lass ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-14
Beautiful poem about a tree, Billy Rob:)
I love how you went through all the stages of the year, the seasons, I mean..
Much beautiful poem, thank you so much for sharing!
God bless:)
5/5 Ingrid
PinkySwear ( F C D )
at 2009-10-14
Fall, take each leaf as you go,
Leave not one behind.
At least, I feel the splendor
Before you are unkind.
This stanza was my favorite, all though the whole poem was brilliant. I agree with each comment. Metaphors are most certainly your calling. Each write has so much tenderness and sorrow. Very enjoyable reads
Gabriel crash gordon ( F C D )
at 2009-10-16
What I noticed most about your poem is the super flow and rhyme. You never missed a beat , each line each stanza is super
DreamOfOlwin ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-16
A beautiful poem that just left me speechless, and in awe. You do indeed write with such tenderness and sadness... but yet your poems are beautiful/ exquisite writes that touch the readers heart. Loved this piece. The metaphors where indeed excellent :) A superb write.
PinkyPrincess ( C )
at 2009-10-19
Beautiful!! This is a very different kind of poem than you usually write.. It's really nice to see you try other things! This was a wonderful poem and you've done a wonderful job! Congratulations on the win!! :)
Genuine Lavender ( F C D )
at 2009-10-19
Congratulations, Rob.
Your lines got shorter, a slightly yet pretty different touch from , and still the beauty of your soft verses can't be challenged...
I hope you are doing ok.
Take best of care.
Deana ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-19
As usual your words and imagery are so beautiful.
I love the use of nature touched with sadness. excellent!
ReBecca ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-20
Oh Rob...this was beautiful! What it does to us when they strip us, and leave us....Wow...I just totally loved how you used nature as a metaphor for this. As always...this is an incredible write from you. I never vote, cause I think it is ridiculous how you can get votes on here...but if I actually did...you woulda definitly got my 5 outta this!!
kelleyana ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-24
Rob, this is wonderful. I just admired your writing. You creates such a vivid image throughout this poem and kept me dreaming from the first stanza until the end. Very well done, kel.
gracey grey ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-25
In surrendering and accepting what is, hope finds its place. its been ages since i came on here, and i'm glad i did today. this poem is undoubtly the best i've read in a while. just one thing, the 4th stanza last line "bye and bye" should have been by and by, i think?
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-10-25
Regardless of the style or subjects you write of my friend, you never fail to deliver the best.
This in my view is a masterpiece and i've enjoyed reading it.Keep up the great work.
paul
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-10-25
By the way, congratilations on the win.It is well deserved.
John Peterson ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-29
Love this it is wonderful and very well written!!
ben thompson ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-03
Rob, your naturesque description of life is outstanding and beautiful as usual. also as usual i find nothing wrong or out of place for me this is just outstanding. all the best ben thompson
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