Rainbow Dreaming ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-29
What a great format.
Really nice flow and tone.
Sylvia A ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-29
So different that you normally write. Your words did make me feel lost as I read it or I should say gave me the feeling of being lost trying to find my way home. Well done.
Faithless ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-30
First and foremost, i would like to say that the title did caught my attention. i feel that there were also some hidden meanings behind this poem, especially for your forth stanza where you said:
Never been prone to using
substances, obscuring
a clear insight,
but nonetheless....I never did see.
^^^ I might be wrong, but i interpret this as someone who has never tried drugs but trying to get their hands on drugs to seek comfort from loneliness.
Well i guess when the substance has taken over you, you're blank, rendering you clueless as to where your home is.
This may not be your usual write, but i'm glad that you're exploring into different directions in your writing.
Excellent job
Ingrid ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-30
Thank you for your sweet comment, Azzza:)
I want to clarify something, sweetheart: I have always been against taking drugs and still am because I do not like to lose grip on reality and what I was trying to say in my poem is that I could not see certain things clearly until now in spite of the fact that I could have, seeing as there never was anything obscuring my view..but my own blindness stood in the way;)
We all have to wake up to reality somewhere down the line!
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-30
I think this poem can be interpreted many ways. The feeling of being lost one of them, but more specifically what you just explained in your comment. A short, but well formated and interesting write with a lot of thought and ways of interpretation.
Lady Nik ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-30
I agree with Temps. I liked this piece this. Very short and to the point. Flows nicely and uses a lot of emotions. Great work :) Nik
Mouris ( F C D )
at 2009-10-31
Well well, Totally different from your other writes. Difficult to say what it was all about..Perhaps a person who has or had lost himself/herself in this materilitic world finds solace in the dark nights or about someone who has been derailed from the track of life and he or she is now at a point where either he orshe has to move on that track or change the course and enter into a new life.
Or may be drugs..Defintely so mnay meanings..
But All I can say this ahs to be the best pice this week on this site..Brilliantly written.I like how you used night, it signifies silence loneliness etc, cause in silence and in lonliness you can find the real you..Great Job
Ray Smallshaw ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
A bit of a deviation from your usual poems yet none the less of excellent quality, I read somewhere once that the poet puts the words to paper but it is his readers who write the poem as they read, meaning I suppose that of his interpretation of those words. I wonder what really made this poem what it is?
Excellent 5/5 Ray S
Kiko ( F C )
at 2009-10-31
This is a wonderful poem on so many levels. It's a shame you felt the need to try to explain it, since it is obviously NOT a poem about a drug trip. In fact, it is probably the finest poem I've read from you and worthy of a nomination... and win.
kelleyana ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
I really love this poem. You are such a great poet my friend and whatever styles or format you do, at the end it's a masterpiece. Very well done, 5/5, kel.
Robert Gardiner ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-01
Excellent Write!!!
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-11-09
I can see where the thought of drugs came in when you use the words substance.But substance can mean more than one thing.It was nice that you explain it.
Another wonderful but realistric piece.
Keep up the great work.
Paul...
The Bird and the Worm ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-15
I noticed right away how different this was from your previous writes. I found myself so into this piece, I think mainly from the format and how you brought your own thought into this. It wasn't just expressionless words but your own thoughts and that put the reader in your mind almost. I hope I am making sense, it just held so much interpretation and emotion. Beautiful job, I felt like it could have gone on forever and I would still be reading it at the edge of my seat..
Take care now
~MaryAnne
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