Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-30
Nitin
This poem is stunning....so beautiful yet such a sadness coming from within your words.
If I tell you to sleep with open eyes
Will you still dream of me dying
Hold my hands and kiss my head
Will you still hear me crying
I hope you know how much holding someones hands when they need you means.
Look at the dividing line in air
Separating my skin from your skin
Drowning my soul in your aroma
Repeatedly imagining our sweet sin
Sometimes our minds can bring so many things to us that are unreachable.
If I ask you to be on your knees forever
Will you pray till we meet on the other side
Keep your hands and knees folded
Wrap in my memories within your mind
What a wonderful thought....not a happier warmer place to be then wrapped in the memories of the one you love so much.
I have chased horizon, kissed sun
Yet craving for a touch from you
With angels all around, I walk alone
Wondering if your sky is still blue
Always remember you never will walk alone....and as long as love exists here or there the Sky's will always be blue.
Excellent job on this piece. It really touched my heart and soul. Bringing tears to my eyes.
I love you yaar
Sylvia A ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
Sad indeed. Thoughts of meeting your love on the other side just waiting for them to be with you again. Well done, Nitin.
Rainbow Dreaming ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
Nitin this was so amazing. Sad and touching like I've never read before.
I often think of what it will be like, if we'll know our love ones? Will they know us?
This was a true forever poem not one of surface quality but eternal ..again beautiful and amazing
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
This was really beautiful yet sad, not sure if theres much more to add to whats been said. This was well written though, & I enjoyed it. Nicely done.
Meena Krish ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
As I read this a scene from the movie Ghost
comes to my mind..a touching write..
billy rob ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-02
"Look at the dividing line in air
Separating my skin from your skin
Drowning my soul in your aroma
Repeatedly imagining our sweet sin"
I have always admired your writes..you pour your emotions into each one. Nitin, there are invisible lines that seperate levels of excellence. You have gone to another level. An excellent write. Very well done, indeed. Billy Rob
Princess Love ( F P C )
at 2009-11-02
Another great one. It has a Nitin touch. Loved it!!!
Dixiedaisy ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-03
Nitin,
This is a stunningly beautiful and heartfelt write. From opening to closing you have poured out emotions making this a true gem. Though it has a sadness to it, the love that is emulated throughout the piece speaks volumes. Wonderful Write.
Take Care,
Kay
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-11-03
The sadness in your words has touched the hearts of all who read them.This is another emotionally charged piece that tugs at the heartstrings.
The meaning of this write, i'm here to tell you my friend that it is possible for the one we love to await us on the otherside.This is a promise made by our lord and savior Jesus Christ.
An enjoyable read.
Paul...
Sourav ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-04
Speechless. So very well written. Emotions are expressed beautifully, lovely construction of the lines. Mesmerizing poem! Amazing!
Mysterious Charmer ( F C )
at 2009-11-06
How your words tug heavely at the beating heart. Each line is equally captivating as the one before it. Beautiful and passionate words are spun in the sadness of this piece. A complete masterpiece!
Take care,
Mysterious Charmer
Rachel RTVW ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-06
What a sad and heartfelt piece. Beautiful job!It flows good and the rhyming isn't forced!
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-09
Congrats to you Nitin....a well deserved win for a beautiful poem.
~Bravo~
Love you
Cindy
debbylyn ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-09
Congrats on the win Nitin! Such a beautiful and emotional poem full of longing and tenderness.....well crafted and emotional! Bravo!!! Take care, Debbie
schizophrenic ( P C )
at 2009-11-10
I want you to be top rated cause my gurl won't come back , enjoy your time with your thoughts while they are havin fun and over Wheeling
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-10
Congrats :]
Way to represent the club.
Countess of Monte Cristo ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-12
Sorry for reading this too late, but this one is a beautiful from you, Nitin. The last sentence was the cherry on top of the icing, and the rest was divine.
This one is a 5 for me my friend. a 5 indeed. Walah
Sourav ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-13
I think this is a well deserved win! This poem is fantastic! As I said earlier it's mesmerizing! Congrats Nitin! :)
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