Lioness ( F P C D )
This is amazing.
I simply love the images though they are filled with sadness and the flow was wonderful.
Reading this from what I gathered is you're talking about a teenage girl (thirteen) who was drugged and assumed raped? I take it this is how she lost her virginity.
I am not sure if I am reading this wrong I thought that it was the case when you're talking about bleeding and her being unconscious. Simply heartbreaking and sad.
I hate the idea of girls having sex at a young age but it is so terrible when someone gets raped. I mean your first time is supposed to be special and this girl was violated and her innocence was taken away.
Very sad poem indeed.
Miss Happiness ( F C D )
What a sad poem, but greatly written :)
gIrL aka Meme ( F P C D )
Speechless is all I feel. And I too, just like Liz, got the same idea that the poem revolves around a young girl who lost her innocence in this way.
Very sad and deep, but the images at the openning lines were just so vividly touching, the level of intensity that this poem leaves you with is so strong.
Lebanese Phoenix ( F C D )
There is something weird I feel when I read all those 'ess' ending terms. They give like this spooky feeling.. or maybe some sense of obscurity.
I like the scenery of transforming from a girl into a woman after being raped. You brought the picture in details with such a style that made me feel unease. Amazing.
crishmerl ( F P C D )
I love the idea and the essence of this poem..the flow and the emotion behind it..really great work...i5/5