Recovering ( F P C D )
Sad but you wrote it so Amazing! :)
PETER EDWARDS ( F C D )
A sad poem but expressed well in so few words.
I enjoyed reading this! Thankyou.
Steven Croat ( F C )
It has a strange sentiment...
I loved it!
Max ( F C D )
This is so emotional,Sad,well written
in other words this is AMAZING
5/5 keep on =)
Xanthe ( F P C D )
"Her body shakes
The dark is all that remains"
Nice imagery. I can easily picture this: a girl so innocent, yet full of pain, shivering perhaps of cold or nervousness or just plain fear..
"Warm hot blood
Running down her wrists."
I'm quite fond of how you wrote 'warm hot' it does show that her blood was full of life, but perhaps in a few moments it will only be cold, and without life..
"Her fingers dance over scars
As she cries
Really haunting ending, yet so beautiful. I only wish you'd enclosed in quotation marks the last line. But still a great read. 5/5 :)
crishmerl ( F P C D )
Amazingly written..i have nothing to say but a big WOW!
You done it perfectly!
Innocent Fairy ( F P C D )
Wow I loved it, great short write,,I pretty much agree with what everyone else said :) 5/5
Paul Gondwe ( F P C D )
You have greatly improved in your writing skills Georgia. This was really sad to read but well written
Shygirl93 ( F C D )
I like the flow of this poem i don't like darkness :)
Naughtymouse ( F C D )
A-M-A-Z-I-N-G ! ! !
I must be blind i haven't seen you here before!
Awesome write omg!
Marvellous ( F P C D )
Failure, is a Learning process. Pain comes to widen reasoning.