Comments : Wandering Thoughts

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Though you claim that those thoughts are randomized, I like the creativity in your imagery so much. I have only one note that minimizing the count of your words would have made it more powerful, but still, I was enchanted to read it, when such lengths pull me away... this is very well written. Loved it, Xanthe :)

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Random thoughts ... Aren't they the best? I think so

    Seems to me that this is the story of how you started writing... And this person was the one that helped you. Also it is sad, how you feel that the relationship between this someone is falling apart at times. And the whole time, the story was narrated, I could picture a bed and the candle light. The question at the beginning says whether to leave it unlit bit seems to be that for a moment it was lit just to reminisce. When it was over, the light was turned off and to sleep... And dream of that dream where you and this person were travelers.

    I like the random thoughts, they set a image and a story. Sad at times... Specially the part about this person and you falling soon too. Hope that doesn't happen.

    • 11 years ago

      by Xanthe

      Thank you.. I hope so too.

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I wanna say, Im happy that you started posting these pieces more. I feel you unlocked a door in your heart and let us in.
    Im sure you're not gonna fall Xanthe, cause you'restrong:)
    Love this piece, awesome job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    I second what Everlasting said
    "Random thoughts ... Aren't they the best?"
    cause this piece is really one of the best it is open for many thoughts to be fit in with the overall idea u give to readers like me tho u mean only one thing, one person there
    I think I know what u talking about here ( but I could be wrong )

    anyway this is really good poem
    and u aren't falling, u will see =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very good read. It sucked me in and made me want to read more. 5/5 The format was good and I really liked how you worded it. Keep up the great work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Xanthe ....i have been dieing to get around to reading some of your work for a while now because i have been a bit distracted...and then i come across this?!?!?!?!

    OMG ! for randomized thought they are AMAZING!

    i love how you create imagery in your work and your writing is in my opinion some of the best i have ever read....just breathtaking.

    LOVE LOVE LOVE!!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I'm sitting here reading this powerful poem of yours Xanthe and I realize my coffee is cold....

    thats because Ive read this several times over because your writings have always touched me... this poem is heartbreaking... You have touched a part of me that wishes to fly away .... very touching piece by you...!!

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    You are a genius. And though I am mad at you, I cannot deny the fact that your poetry melts me.

    Well-done and well-deserved.

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    Congratulates on The Win

  • 11 years ago

    by Stephen

    Aww why did this have to end?! I was so consumed in reading this poem. Although it is quite sad, it's very beautiful also. I love the imagery you've used here, it really makes this piece come to life.

    If I wasn't taught of clemency dwelling
    within baby's breath, I would never have
    noticed poetry trapped in your eyes last
    February. I remember forgetting the
    memories at the foot of my bed and
    only finding them when I no longer
    needed them.

    I love this stanza, because it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. The last two lines really stuck with me in this stanza. Many times I too have forgotten memories only to find them coming back to me when I didn't need them, in such a haunting manor... Good stuff, I really enjoyed this poem, keep it up!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    My Lady,

    Your poetry enchants me. A well deserved win!

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Congratulations, Xanthe.
    I will name my daughter after you hehe