Comments : Light a candle ( a poem for the world)

  • 11 years ago

    by With This Slow Tune I Tell You Goodbye

    One little grammar mistake here and there but the poem is soo beautiful it tells its story very well with the emotions and the imagery it's wow! takes my breathe away and now i want to call my fiance and tell him to take a caution since i love him i don't want him to die and yeah i had a friend die long ago but I'm not sad me and her were good friends and she told me not to be sad when life gets ruff since there will be a lot of bad times ahead and to smile even if it's killing me inside it's better to smile and live life with joy even if others can't.... AWESOME POEM DUDE! :) 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Ugh I know that losing a loved one, is one of the hatdest feelings ever, cant imagine how it feels. My best of wishes to those who lost someone. This is sooo touching, I couldnt hold my tears, I saw a friend of mine suffering from that, after losing someone.

    Really great job..

  • 11 years ago

    by The Ninja

    I really like it. I lost my best friend a while ago... 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Wow. This poem is sad, yet sweet for the rememberence of loved ones whom are no longer with us. As a person whom's lost so many, this poem means a lot, and I'm sure to others whom have lost long ago, or not so long ago, it means a lot too. Great job Tony (5)
    ~Harlea

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    The heartbeat is the most beautiful
    sound in the world, to hear the sound
    of a loved ones is like music sent from heaven.

    - this is so very true and I adore this little opening as it is something I miss hearing very much and so can truly relate to this.

    But what we sometimes forget are the
    hearts that stops everyday ,their candle
    light fades before disappearing into darkness.

    - stops should just be stop.
    - the idea of the candle disappearing shows the true loss of that person, the darkness that is felt by those loved ones left behind.

    From disease, accidents to natural deaths
    people everyday fight there sadness to continue
    life without the most precious people that conquered
    Their heart.

    -put a comma after deaths. there sadness should be their sadness. Their in the last line is capitalized but it shouldn't be as it implies a new sentence which it isn't.
    - Apart from the above, this stanza really touched me because it is a battle that we have to fight everyday to continue without them and it can be so painful, worded very movingly.

    Let's unite and remember the people who
    lived and meant so much to us,and to others
    light a candle and let their light shine,one last time.

    - this is such an inspiring poem as it offers comfort to others who have been there and you are inviting everybody else to join you and to know that you are not alone in this and we can all be together through times like this.

    (This is for everyone that has lost someone in there life )

    - I chose to comment on your added information here because I thought it showed a bit of your caring personality that you took the time to write this poem not for yourself but for the others as well. It was very touching and I admire you for doing so.

    Loved this <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Very touching, thank you for writing this... it shows how much you truly care about others and that you understand the pain people go through when losing loved ones.