Comments : The One That Used To Lie There

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I like this a lot.

    The internal rhyme and flow throughout are excellent. It's funny, as I read it, I could almost imagine this being the lyrics to a rock song. You don't play guitar do you?lol

    Take care and all the best,
    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Some Random Human

      I do not play guitar, but I do consider my writings to be lyrics. Can't sing either, though.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Love this. The internal rhyming and flow is brilliant. I feel myself hiding along as I've been there but haven't we all?

    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    This had such a wonderful rhythm and flow I found myself humming along as I read it, trying to find a tune.
    Much like Ben, to me they feel like powerful lyrics that beg to be set to rock music.
    Great write. :)

    • 7 years ago

      by Some Random Human

      I lack the musical talent to do so, but I definitely had a rock tune in my head.