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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Another sad and touching story, filled with emotions which leave us lost. I like how you have used a rhyming scheme here for this poem, which helped with the flow. I also like the questions being repeated throughout, I think it shows the state of mind at the time, when there are so many unknowns, so many answers we seek but cannot find them, and so in the end we give up, we stop expecting, and in this case, run away from it.

    It reminded me that running away is maybe not the answer, but when we feel we will know the answer, and know it will not be the one we want, running away and having some control over leaving, is easier than being told the truth and finding out the answer for real.

    I liked this and could relate to it, you portray your feelings well.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Picked at random and pleased I did. Was choked up at the end of this one! Agree with Saffie: the rhyming scheme works well here, but then, I would say that!