I didn't see any tech. errors :). In a long dark or sad poem word play is always key and imagery doesn't need to be in the front I feel. But using words that captivate the reader and pull them in. You have done well here. Shadows really work well here because you don't know how the shadows will do. They follow you yes but that can go many different way and you get the mind excited. They seem to be the shadows of your past or how you are feeling right now because of the mirror, you don't like what you see. I really love the second scene. Especially the hands.

Hands you can play around with a lot and you never know what will happen. When there is no one to hold back, that builds up the loneliness and sadness. That's how I see it at least. When you say you are slipping... I liked how you put it at its own line. Because it further more enhances the tone of the poem.

I really liked the metaphor s at the have You really get the sense of the feelings you hold inside overall and did a great job with the wording. Antarctica I feel is perfect as it shows and compares the feelings you have which are cold and that in tells depression. Well done overall.

I like the ending where the metaphor is actually really funny to me I know that sounds horrible but it is it shows how futile some decisions are but the poem over all is very pretty :) I also like the part that you're trying to hold on and you're slipping a very nice climatic moment to be sure. some things are hard to do or say or whatever the case maybe I hope you find light soon or if I'm wrong good luck best wishes

-Bet

First off, I truly love the title. There are some titles that I don't perceive as being significant or moving, but this one shows the depth you're writing about. Such a solemn piece.... I like how you start off with the reference to Eve, as the story of her being tempted is one many can probably recognize. There's also a sadness to it because she was the first woman and gave in, just like we all have done, and because of that we feel hopeless and like we don't have strength or willpower. Like you fighting with the reflection in the mirror.

For the second stanza, just a suggestion, I don't think you need the "Even" at the beginning, or if you keep that, then take out the "as" in the last line, because when reading it something doesn't flow right. That image though of trying to hold on is relatable and terrifying when we don't have a grasp, or control perhaps.

There are some good metaphors here and I think they are well-placed; they are thought-provoking. I also like how you mention you tend to flowers in and arrange them in a vase, yet there isn't water. That makes me think you try, you care, you do your best yet other forces work against you. The ending I was not expecting but those few lines leaves the reader feeling that hopelessness, especially considering you don't feel you can be brought out of that cold, oppressive depth. You will make it through this though, it may not be easy and may be an everyday struggle, but you can push through.

Keep holding on, thinking of you...

Tending to
the flowers that are neatly
presented in a beautiful
vase-only, they never
have any water.
^I loved the wording here! Without water, there is no life and no way for the flowers to survive. Which really reflects what darkness and such is like... you feel empty & life perhaps has a bit less meaning when you're down. Portrays the struggle and emotions you're going through all too well.. I really loved the metaphor

And the metaphor at the way end about Antarctica is wonderful. Just continues to really emphasize your feelings. Hope you become completely better soon! :)