Comments : Breakers Reef

  • 9 years ago

    by Darren

    When I first read this I read 'surf' as 'turf' and thought genius!!

    Confused out of my mind without you, like a ship in the turf...

    Then I re-read and thought ... yes surf does make sense.

    I love he choppy flow, the short and long lines almost a bobbling rhythm to it.

    A nice poem that cleverly uses the prompts.

    • 9 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Thanks, I wanted an effect like a ship rocked back and forth in the waves, drifting helpless toward the unseen reefs.

  • 9 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ohh I think you accomplished that effect Larry!
    Truly a delightful and heartfelt poem!

    The visual format makes this piece shine!
    there is a sadness within this poem, missing someone.. and so the metaphor works nicely here...