Comments : The smile i wear

  • 9 years ago

    by gloria

    The last line makes the point. The rest is a bit repetitive but not bad. Just long

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    In the beginning of every stanza for me would be better if you were to go like this

    The smile I wear is:....etc"
    and so on it would look better and for me would make it much more beautiful not that it isn't already 5/5

    Hold on to life hun because it's very bipolar :)

    -Bet