Comments : Loss-A Sonnet

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    A single time is enough to evoke
    Memory of the forgotten pain but

    ^ something is missing here, maybe A memory or memories? It just doesn't flow quite right and it makes the reader stumble a little.

    Other than that, this is a wonderful sonnet. Great job, very well described emotions and beautifully penned thoughts.

  • 9 years ago

    by Fading Memory

    It's just perfect they way it came out , brilliant i just love it , feel's true close and calling :)