Comments : My Despair

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Way too many people can relate to this, trust me I know. But at the same time you've made this so personal and let your heart shine through in such a perfectly sad way. Amazing piece, though Might I suggest taking it out of the center format? It distracts the audience a little with this piece.

    Also the last line I think would have more of an impact if it were separated from the rest of the piece by a blank line or two or something like that.

    "I was caught in that spell.
    And just like that, all was lost."

    ^ I love that

  • 9 years ago

    by Fading Memory

    Beautiful amazing just a very fine piece of finest art :) just like it