I don't think it needs editing. I just hope that feeling you have passes with time and you'll realize theres more to life. <3

Wow, this is a really powerful poem. There is a lot going for it. First of all the message is really strong, you are trying and fighting so hard to stay alive. For your friends need you as you need them. The rhyming was also really good and to me didn't take away the flow of the poem. The non capitalization here works well, even with the "i's". I think you did this so you wouldn't bring attention to yourself, because this poem is not truly about you it's about your friends. Hang in there mate. Excellent write.

I dare to disagree with my fellow poets ( No offence James and Liz) but I am a stickler to the spelling sorry it's a good poem but I have that pet peve I like capalization in the poem it cannot win with errors it will win if it's perfection or near flawless that being said it's a good poem just I couldn't stand to read it that much for long since I see my past in here and it made me a bad poet

-Mori

If I were you, I would not want any part of death...At least not until you've composed a compendium of your thoughts. Nice poem; leave your legacy through words.

Oh, P.S. poetic license gives you freedom to write how you see fit. I do it all the time. Sorry, Mori.