Comments : Quest for Quiet

  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    Just titled it thanks to some friendly advice.

  • 9 years ago

    by Dane Carpenter

    Best I've seen in a while. I love the abstract rhyming, don't see too much of that now days. Really captivating and easy to relate to in many different aspects.

    WD. :)

    p.s. Maybe use a repetitive or unique line in the poem as the title. :)

    • 9 years ago

      by Ziad Assaad

      Thanks man, Appreciate all criticisms. Look forward to applying them as I grow.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    How do I edit my poem? Anyone know? I used the wrong "its". Damn apostrophe.

  • 9 years ago

    by Liz

    To edit, go to "your poems" on the right side of your screen. It lists all your poems with options to edit, delete, or feature. :)

    I also like the rhyming in this, it gives it an easy rhythm. And just an opinion, I think it would look much better without the /forward slashes/ , maybe just regular punctuation? I guess the slashes are easier, though.

    • 9 years ago

      by Ziad Assaad

      Thank you. I think you are correct. Forced habit from writing lyrics. I appreciate the time taken to, not only read, but also reply.
      I was never concerned with the "look" of one's writings. But having read through much of what is posted on this website, I realize that stylistically, the aesthetic of the work itself is important. Plus, the inflection in various verses could definitely use punctuation.