Comments : Another Attempt

  • 9 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    For a very newly recent member I'm amazed by your talent! I love the poem and the way it flowed and seemed to rhyme throughout the poem and never once did it feel forced. What I didn't like was the fact that it didn't have commas, and it wasn't made into stanzas which would've helped to make it even more beautiful, regardless of those little things it's stunning and I hope this was to get off your chest because I want to read more of your poetry! 5/5

    -Mori

    • 9 years ago

      by Christina

      Thank you so much! I'm sorry you didn't like how I didn't use commas or stanzas however I did this on purpose. At the time when I thought of this it was going to be in place of my suicide letter (though I obviously survived). As I was writing this it seemed as if all my thoughts were jumbled and bleeding into one another. I tried to create this same effect in the poem.

    • 9 years ago

      by Christina

      Thank you so much! I'm sorry you didn't like how I didn't use commas or stanzas however I did this on purpose. At the time when I thought of this it was going to be in place of my suicide letter (though I obviously survived). As I was writing this it seemed as if all my thoughts were jumbled and bleeding into one another. I tried to create this same effect in the poem.