Comments : Freedom

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I enjoyed this a lot, Timothy. I love your use of metaphors throughout this poem, "you are a leaf.......the clouds have become your playground" - wonderful imagery conjured here.
    A lovely take on untimely death, indeed: they can leave this "mortal coil" but head for somewhere better still where they can be "children forever".
    Well done - I love the positive feel of this,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Timothy

      Thank you kindly.

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Do we and those who depart this world gain real freedom..? Perhaps we do and I like how you have used a leaf as a symbol of a departed soul. It can go wherever it wants to and it might...it might just come whisk by us...a touching poem yet its given a child like atmosphere of lost innocence.