Comments : Breaking Hurts

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Saffie,

    I think what I found particularly sad about this piece is the fact that - as you acknowledge - you have survived a massive amount of darkness and yet, here you are again in the darkest place you have ever been. "No one has ever left me in this much darkness."
    My only suggestion is "broken in two" rather than "broken into"
    Take care and all the best,
    Ben